“Look, Hamlet! There’s the rub.”
Here are my quarrels with the state in which I left Scene 10 last night (and I already hear the solutions):
1.The transition into A feels just a little rushed, chaotic. The insertion of one measure will be all the space needed to make it coherent. (That said, the present m.11 is a corrective insert added to Sunday’s halfway score; that did reduce some of the crowding, but the intersection needs just a little attention more.)
2. At C, similar objection. All that is needed here, I think, is to give the clarinet and viola some space to sound their D alone for a “beat” before the rhythmic accompaniment begins. mm.35-40 is a “character variation”; the original returns mid-phrase in mm.41-44 ... a seam which I think works fine.
3. At D, it’s close. Unlike 1. and 2., I don’t think that any more time need be added; just a brief gesture, perhaps the hint of an anticipation in the trombones.
4. Mm.50-62 are a literal import from Scene 1. I almost think that I want that vibe to run a little longer; so either I decide that I’m happy with the passage as it is (and make a very slight modification of the cadence), or I may try bringing in an adaptation of another, noncontiguous Scene 1 passage.
In any case, Scene 10 will reach a happy ending early this evening.